Tuesday Tiny Writing Tips #3 – Environment/Surroundings

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Introduce the environment by interacting with it instead of enlisting what’s there.

Example:

The old drawler screeched when he opened it and then once again as – after placing his diary inside – he closed it. He leaned his back against that of the wooden chair and stretched, his arms spread to the side, his head tilted back so that his gaze fell on the gradually growing crack on the ceiling. On instinct the boy looked down; he was not surprised to see tiny parts of said ceiling powdered on his warn out-carpet.

Isn’t that better than “In his room, there was an old desk, wooden chair, worn-out carpet and his ceiling was falling apart”?

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